Flint/strike consonants
kindle my tongue
till flames lick the vowels
and my lips burn
with your name.
At Real Toads, Dr. Hisashi Nakamura is sharing his thoughts on the writing of tanka.
Saturday, September 21, 2013
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15 comments:
You have such a great way with words. Love this.
smoking. pun intended :)
Awesome. MZ!!
It is wonderful how you separate out the consonants and vowels here and give clear tones to each. Really creative and well done, MZ. Karin of Manicddaily (on mobile device.). K.
The idea of a name being a tactile entity which can be felt in the mouth, even burn, is very original.
Wow! You are the goddess of saying so much with such few words!
..my lips burn with your name.. very powerful.
I love the ambiguity in that last line... the burn can mean so many things... loss, passion...
sounds incendiary!
Dangerously romantic, but then again isn't all romance dangerous to your heart :)
burn your name, flaming tanka MZ ~
oooh, hot!
Sensual and I'm partial to sound devices. Great on the tongue.
Oh, that could be a lot of licking ;D
Fun and spicy!
"kindle my tongue"... Wow. You have just an awesome gift with words... (your husband must never win an argument :)
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