Got a shiver scream that shatters the scale-
a banshee wail rising up from the blues,
but it's the breath behind the beat
that havens truth.
So, I give gravel and guts to the girls up front -
I've walked in their high heeled shoes.
And the barefoot sigh on the B-side,
I save for you.
A Flash Fiction 55 Real Toads
Saturday, October 4, 2014
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18 comments:
Wow Mama Zen....I love the message you belt out with this. "but it's the breath behind the beat that havens truth."....yea this is amazing!!!
Excellent metaphor! There is much to be said for the B side.
;-)
Ah, no one says/writes it better, MZ!! Hope you have a great weekend!!
This a surprisingly complete, complex and compelling tale in 55, MZ--and sometimes the B-side is the only one to listen to.
Leonard Cohen has a new album .. he could sing this ~ for sure, his style!!! Love it.
It's all about breathing! All good singers know that. Wow this is AWESOME! I'd love to hear you sing…
I adore this, Kelli. I love "gravel and guts" and the rhyme and the whole thing. Sigh.
This indeed carries a blues too cool beat...love it, Mama Zen!
Love "the breath behind the beat that havens truth" and saving the B side "for you".
The B-side is where that sigh is saved.. So much to be said that we can only do within the frame of silence.
Ah charming. Super well done. The breath that havens is so great--there is the magic of syncopation that you have caught here--just terrific.
It makes me remember seeing Muddy Waters once years ago in a small bar. He was so great. I never wore high heels but unfortunately, the barefoot boy (those words somehow describe him) had me saved for the B side. (Ha.) k.
Love. I've never been up there, but I feel it all through this poem.
A banshee singing the Blues... Now that's magical!
Opening lines are stellar MZ ~
Wonderful! You made my evening :)
ZQ
This is definitely a blues song..love it. Often the B side has the best music.
aaah, yeah...
Love that B side!
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