Put on
your favorite brand of birdsong.
Meet me
between the cardboard sheets.
I have
two hours worth of stardust.
Make a wish
before I'm obsolete.
You keep me
contained in your collection.
Fragile
as the future and out of reach.
Sacred as the stones
you've styled contentment.
Foreign, flesh and blood,
and obsolete.
For Kenia's Get Listed prompt at Real Toads
Wednesday, February 19, 2014
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- Maude Lynn
- Anybody who has survived his childhood has enough information about life to last him the rest of his days. ---Flannery O'Connor
16 comments:
I love where your words take us.
There's something very taking about these couplets, each building from the former, even though the message may be ambivalent, it still seems worth deciphering the runes on the stones, because so much is lost in translation. Excellent and moody piece, MZ.
Yes, you've done it again, MZ!! Love it!!!
Cheers Mama Zen! Your words dance off the page~ Bravo
make a wish before I'm obsolete - yes yes yes!
Sounds like being valued without being seen.
Love it love it love it!!! The form and sounds and the message delivered!
Thank you muchly for answering the prompt. <3
Kisses!
Wonderful! 'Fragile as the future and out of reach' .. I love this line!
"Make a wish before I am obsolete" Love that...beautiful work as always
A new thing for me, the wish that must be made before the last line! "Fragile as the future and out of reach"--unlike, say, Tinkerbell, who we always saved by desperate applause. "Obsolete" is fantastic!
Someone's picture perfect fantasy of intimacy. Even when kept under glass, it is perishable.
The intention - enough! Perfect!
ack. mine is about 27 times as long and says about 1/5. ~
The first line I adore. How much fun you had with this list!
What a wonderful poem you've created from the list. I love your use of couplets in this.
lately, that's my middle name, love this one MZ
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