They swim
like a school of fools
to The Jug Line
for cheap cocktails and cleavage -
"more than a mouthful!" -
and to help each other tread
truth's choppy waters.
To crack a few jokes,
slap some ass,
and lie
about pussy, perch, and big mouth bass.
To keep themselves from ever asking
for something more.
Fiction in 55 for my G-Man.
Thursday, September 13, 2012
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- Maude Lynn
- Anybody who has survived his childhood has enough information about life to last him the rest of his days. ---Flannery O'Connor
22 comments:
I'm more of a Leg guy, but Jugs are just fine too.
YOUR Jug Line was way more than a mouthful...
Damn you write so vividly.
Loved your 55 MZ
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
This reminds me of my days tending bar!
a little chilling in its reality...faking it til you make it or well just keep faking it....
You do indeed write so vividly! Terrific 55, indeed!
Hmmm, just fishin' eh?
"To keep themselves from ever asking for something more."
Wow. That's really powerful, MZ.
good one, MZ!
♥
LOL Lots of fish tales here then...mine was (__________) This big.... Jugs...haha
"...tread truth's choppy waters" and "pussy, perch and big mouth bass" are wonderful lines.
This was done in only 55 words? *itch! ;)
hmmm! provocative... I see the flashing neons after dark...
Wishing you a lovely weekend MZ :)
Hugs xoxo
Damn girl you can write! Wonderful 55! A lot of people do that, sadly. Mine is here
Have you an AWESOME WEEKEND!
hugs
shakira
Have you been hanging out at the redneck bars again? So funny!
Ha! I guess it's a good sign they're still sober enough to swim that far...but I'm think they might drown in more intellectual waters.
The just don't seem worth the hassle, when you put it like this...
Geez, what an existence...
School of fools! how right you are!
love the sardonic wit- wish I could fry some eyes but it would change nothing... Thanks.
This is actually really clever.
A perfect 55. And, yeah, I wish I was there. :)
Why am i thinking of a holiday inn with a coaches convention?
Rick
you rock at holding nothing back. I want to do that more often.
Wonderfully done. The limitations (of words) do not show. Other limitations maybe. k.
Something tells me, this is all they really want. Not a word wasted, and so much punch! You've done it again...
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