photo by Ellen Wilson
shakes the branches
with an eye to winning ribbons.
Autumn Woman
shakes in places
she doesn't think is fair.
Judging a pear / pair.
A stab at a sevenling for the Sunday Challenge at Real Toads
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- Maude Lynn
- Anybody who has survived his childhood has enough information about life to last him the rest of his days. ---Flannery O'Connor
33 comments:
Very clever! Love it!!
clever indeed, MZ. This form is much fun, but a little work. I enjoyed your use of contradiction in the first and second stanza, and your one line third stanza pack a delicious punch. well done.
Clever indeed! And just the giggle I needed to wind down my day!! Sleep well, MZ! I know I will now!!
Very clever. I love it, MZ.
I love this. But I have to ask... And what of Winter Woman?
This picture is very evocative of Autumn... and every woman must proudly flaunt her luscious pears at the fair!
Great poem! I'm still smiling after reading it!
ha, fun dance in your verse...nice word play...i rather like the fair, and you gave me a little chuckle at the pair....smiles
Laffin @ Kerry's comment.
Yes, in Autumn the fruit hangs low on the trees. Sometimes it almost drags on the ground...without proper support, of course.
Love this, MZ!
wonderfully written!
Nice and clever !
Clever haiku. Enjoyed them.
This was fun :-)
Totally relatable--and very sharply drawn--and of course I am also ROFling--reminds me of the old blues line "if you don't want my peaches, honey don't shake my tree."
I like the contrast, yet the pairing is strong ~
Love it! This autumn woman is liking the "shaking" going on in her pair. lol
Very funny, MZ. And so clever. k.
Just got back from the county fair in my area. I love a blue ribbon and I love a pear (or pair). :)
Love your twist on this! Very nicely done!
Very clever! A great ending!
... I think my Autumn has arrived... ;P
a real ender...what a poem...
I love her!
Simply for being september girl
The rest was gravy
Rick
Love, love this!!!
SO entertaining, Mama!! Nicely captured pears/pair! :)
Ah, the effects of gravity on the pair, er...pear. Lol, nice one!
ooooh love it, you had me from September Girl.
Fun, crisp, pudgy, sweet. I like your poems that take me by the scruff of the neck and shake.
This is very clever and fun. I guess I'm in autumn... I sure shake in places I'm not happy about.
Well Done, so fun to read ;D
Very intelligent poetry. I love it.
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