Undone
as the buttons on a barfly's dress.
We wore madness
when we dressed to impress.
And, disappointed butterflies
with our tasteless flowers.
You let me sleep
when the house caught fire.
You bound my feet
with ribbons and barbed wire.
Ran me down like rain
on a window pane,
but I didn't go.
I just had to know
what it was like to hurt for love.
Sanity wears a somber suit.
Maturity favors darker hues.
Sobriety's a hair shirt;
sometimes I still itch.
I think about you every summertime
when the days are longer
and the sun stretches out the time
it beats down like pain
until a window of rain
opens in the sky
to let a storm blow by.
And, I know better
than to call it love.
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About Me
- Maude Lynn
- Anybody who has survived his childhood has enough information about life to last him the rest of his days. ---Flannery O'Connor
19 comments:
Sanity wears a somber suit.
Maturity favors darker hues.
Sobriety's a hair shirt;
sometimes I still itch.
dang...that stanza is a poem itself...really great piece...fantastic creative imagery to tell the story...
Anything but Love.
This is love. It is stormy but is love! Tolerance come into play! Very well crafted MZ!
Hank
"And, disappointed butterflies
with our tasteless flowers."
That's inspired.
So much of this is so so good. But the first two stanzas are some of the best I've read, and the end is absolutely a tear-bringer. Fine fine work, MZ.
"I just had to know
what it was like to hurt for love."
This is a universal truth indeed.
This was great.
I'll add a third "fine" to Hedgewitch's comment. Sharp and beautiful, as usual.
This is so good. There has been a subtle theme to your recent work, and it vworks so well for me.
This is right on! Bravo!
wearing madness..dressed to impress..and disappointed butterflies with tasteless flowers..loved this
Vivid. Powerful imagery. Extremely strong piece MZ. Thanks
Creative imagery and such truth. Well done and thank you for this.
You write about love and heart-break and everything in between with such flair and style - not a word misplaced or emotion over-wrought...
(fyi - I'm green with envy at this image... wish I had come up with it:
until a window of rain
opens in the sky
too, too good.)
Wow this was beautiful to read. Felt like i was on a dark but enlightening journey. But it hurt to read the end cuz i still hope, maybe, just maybe, it was love somehow.
Rick
Sobriety's a hair shirt, sometimes I still itch.
I FEEL this. Great imagery.
A new and deeper twist on the idea of wearing one's heart on their sleeve.
I love this piece ~ Great use of the rain to capture your emotional depth ~
Love this:
"Undone
as the buttons on a barfly's dress.
We wore madness"
Ouch:
"You let me sleep
when the house caught fire." ... This is really great. You finally let me sleep for a while, but not really at the best time. :)
"You bound my feet
with ribbons and barbed wire." ... Perfect.
"And, I know better
than to call it love." ... Gut punch.
This is what I like to call brilliant. One of your best.
This is truly beautiful. You have a deep power, and I don't know if you're content to keep it subtle or I just haven't yet hit the posts where it'll slam me full force. Either way, your expression is wonderful.
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