A phoenix drowned in
raven's rain. Ashes dirty
the water. Still, I
drink, breathe the soot soaked
air, and wait to be split wide
by dark feathered wings.
for Haiku Heights.
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About Me
- Maude Lynn
- Anybody who has survived his childhood has enough information about life to last him the rest of his days. ---Flannery O'Connor
22 comments:
"...wait to be split wide"...oh yeah...
Just a dark cocoon before you spread your gorgeous wings and fly away?
I stole that from Joni Mitchell, but if anyone I know is harboring secret dark feathers it would be you, Ms. Poet.
A grand jolt in that final line.
split wide bythe emergingbird within...nice vivid imagery MZ
A drowned phoenix is certainly a starling image, considering that the phoenix is supposed to rise from the ashes and live again!
Can you see a phoenix here or here?
Twas amazing from start to finish absolutely fascinating write, thanks for the read
wings that split. you are a special writer.
Very elegant and also dynamic.
Good take on the prompt...
JJRod'z
Fabulous write. Powerful ending, indeed. : )
Wonderful imagery.
your haiku(s) are terrific! Great imagery with this one, almost like you're morphing into a bird...
Enjoyed these...but aren't phoenixes supposed to rise from the ashes new...your idea of split wings too is appealing.
Love the passion and drama of this!
Wow, Mama Zen! Fantastic tale spun with words and image. That last line packs quite a punch. :)
Everything works here ... everything!
This is quite powerful!
so darkly fascinating
beautiful.
;)
Wonderfully done!
"dark feathered wings" is SO fun to say. !! Very nice.
Brilliant stuff!
Anna :o]
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