It is warm and wet,
but still winter,
despite the spring wish
on the wind
that whispers wake.
Winter winks his weather eye -
it's still his time.
Warm and wet
for this circle and tilt,
for this spin and slant
but the stay of the sun
will be too short
for suckling -
just enough to stir
the sluggish blood
of stem and bud
with whispers wake.
Winter, blind your weather eye!
With a sigh, I eye Old Winter -
withering, winnowing Winter -
not wicked, but wise to cling to the ancient turnings
and yearnings of before and always.
My half-formed flowers,
wintered still-births;
my blooms undone by night
winds from the north
that whisper
and wail like witches
at Winter's wake.
A rough draft for Magaly's prompt at Real Toads
Still tinkering with it
Monday, April 3, 2017
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- Maude Lynn
- Anybody who has survived his childhood has enough information about life to last him the rest of his days. ---Flannery O'Connor
10 comments:
The repetition is very effecting. The reminder that it is still winter, even after spring is supposed to be here keeps us from forgetting that things are dying... out of time.
Something magical in these lines, MZ.. all the lovely W sounds together.
blooms undone...such a potent phrase.
Fantastic! your closing is especially good, the whispering and wailing like witches in winter's wind.
MZ--The last stanza is my favorite.
This is epic in length, compared to most of your poems. ;) And this is rough? I'd like to be capable of such rough writing.
your rough drafts are gale force, MZ ~
My half-formed flowers,
wintered still-births;
my blooms undone by night
winds from the north
that whisper
and wail like witches
at Winter's wake.
Beautifully haunting!!❤️
The alliteration and repetition create a mounting feeling of doom.
The alliteration on w adds so much... your poem is breath
Awesome! I love your ending!!
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