She's twelve, and she wants
to spend all day
tromping the midway
and tasting everything
so I fish for dollars
and somehow refrain
from sermons
on what's really fair.
For Poetry Pantry at Poets United.
Note: I have a new poem (Silent Movie) in this week's issue of Page and Spine. Let me know what you think!
Sunday, July 10, 2016
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About Me
- Maude Lynn
- Anybody who has survived his childhood has enough information about life to last him the rest of his days. ---Flannery O'Connor
18 comments:
Sheesh, can I feel this one. It goes W-A-Y deeper than I'd like it to.
Yes, let's let her be twelve. She will learn justice and injustice by osmosis, because she is your child. I enjoyed Silent Movies, too, and congrats on being published again so soon.
yes, time enough for her to learn that life is generally un-fair.
the word play is a treat - I tend to agree with the others perhaps for now fair can wait until she is too old for funfairs!
The word play is not clever and sweet here and there is a strong sense of mother daughter tug and pull and love. Thanks. And thanks for kind comment, MZ. K.
Ha. I am typing in iPhone and I meant to put SO fun and sweet and the phone with its own mind wrote not. sheesh! Very sweet poem! K.
I think it's not really the time to learn what's fair... fair is a wonderful word to use for wordplay.
I loved the word play too....oh those times on the midway...what memories....
Oh, I think the midway is the bane of ALL parents' existence. But it seems to be a rite of passage for all adolescents. Sigh.
The wordplay, the depth... I enjoyed this one and "Silent Movie." ("Drowning" in the orchestra pit--clever.)
Are you ramping up for another book? ;)
"Silent Movie" is awesome. So are you, and so is Baby Puppy, elephant ears and all. :-)
That moment of letting going is very hard but one you you have to trust them and hope your advice has sunk in. I too read "Silent Movie" and still remember a few still screening at the kids cinema on Saturday mornings in the '40's!
Ha! Love the use of two meanings of fair. I must say I thought you were going to go off on "fishing" for dollars. I saw a amusement park game in my mind for a second.
Nicely encapsulated! And I enjoyed your 'Silent Movie' poem too.
Both poems(this and Silent Movie) have a very mild, unpainted sort of delivery--yet when you look at/into them, you see all the shadows that can't be banished by a clean surface. Some things have to be self-taught, indeed.
Sigh... such a deep and profound write :D
This was beautiful and wry - what's really unfair is how quickly your little one will grow up. By writing this, you'll keep this memory fresh forever. Lovely.
"Silent Movie" was delightful.
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